Alayze, I can see you listened and learned a lot from Ms Scanlan's lesson. Well done you! I love the way you have used your imagination and included lots of detail. I really like the way you described the rainbow as big bright and colourful. Alway remember to read your writing out loud when you are editing to make sure it makes complete sense. Remember that 'and' is a conjunction and joins ideas it doesn't start sentences. What do you like most about writing what if stories? Keep up the great work. From Mrs Carruthers.
Alayze, I can see you listened and learned a lot from Ms Scanlan's lesson. Well done you! I love the way you have used your imagination and included lots of detail. I really like the way you described the rainbow as big bright and colourful. Alway remember to read your writing out loud when you are editing to make sure it makes complete sense. Remember that 'and' is a conjunction and joins ideas it doesn't start sentences. What do you like most about writing what if stories?
ReplyDeleteKeep up the great work. From Mrs Carruthers.